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Some people think that some individuals are naturally good leaders while others think individuals can learn leadership skills. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is an ongoing debate about whether leadership
skills
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 are innate or learnable,
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 some nations think that only a certain population with inborn attributes become leaders. I believe that anyone can become a leader with practice and training. It is understandable why some argue that leaders are born with certain qualities,
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 as self-confidence, and
others
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.
Such
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 attributes allow them to motivate and inspire
others
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.
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, communities are willing to follow them.
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, children who grow up in families with strong leadership traditions may naturally develop their confidence and communication
skills
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 from an early age. People with innate talent not only motivate
others
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 but
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 should know how to solve
crowd's
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promlems
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problems
 calmly Despite these arguments, I side with those who believe that anyone can become a good head through training and learning.
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, if people were taught
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skills
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 since first grade of school by teachers or parents,
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, they would be managers and could control their team.
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, many leadership courses help participants develop communication and decision-making
skills
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. Attending
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 classes leads bodies to gain self-confidence and become good role models for
others
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. In conclusion,
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 some believe that people who are born with inborn attributes can only become a good example, I wholeheartedly agree that anyone can become a leader through training and learning
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, undoubtedly
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Explain each view more fully. The first view needs a clearer reason why people are born as leaders, and the second view needs a stronger example of how training makes a person a leader.
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Some ideas are too general. For example, say what a child learns at school, such as how to lead a group, make a plan, and help solve problems.
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Keep your key words clear. Use “leaders” and “leadership skills” more often. Words like “population”, “good head”, and “bodies” do not fit well here.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part follow one clear plan: main idea, reason, example, and short result. This will make your points easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Do not use “as a result” when the link is not very clear. For example, being taught leadership at school does not always mean people will become managers.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words: “This is because”, “For example”, “Also”, and “Therefore”. Make sure each link shows the right meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Fix unclear lines, such as “solve crowd's promlems calmly” and “Attending such classes leads bodies”. Clear sentences will help the flow of the essay.
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You discuss both views and give a clear opinion: leadership can be learned.
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You use examples about school, family, and courses to explain your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an end.
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You use linking words such as “For instance”, “Despite these arguments”, and “Furthermore”.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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