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The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who travel to Australia in 2005 and 2015. The graph below shows the number of tourists who use two types for holiday.

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The chart below illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
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 from three
diferent
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different
 countries who visited
Australia
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 in 2005 and 2015 and
present
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presents
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 their types of holiday.
Overall
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, Japanese
tourists
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 in
Australia
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 were the most common nationality in 2005,
whereas
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 the US
travelers
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travellers
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 were the least popular
tourist
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tourists
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 over that year.
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, both
UK
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the UK
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 and
US
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the US
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 surpassed
significantly the
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the number of Japanese visitors significantly
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number
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 of Japanese
visitors
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 in 2015. At the beginning of the period, tourism from Japan in
Australia
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 recorded just over 1,400,000
visitors
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, which surpassed to a large extent the
tourist
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tourists
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 from the United Kingdom, who accounted for 800,000
visitors
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 and the United States
travelers
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travellers
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,
which
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who
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 registered just under 600,000 people
traveling
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travelling
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 in
Australia
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. Regardless of their Nationality, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who stayed at hotels and resorts increased moderately from 2005 to 2010, registering nearly 2,500,000
tourists
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.
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 the
resorts
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 guests peaked
at
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in
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 2010, they fell moderately to slightly over 1,000,000
tourists
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 in 2015.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of backpacking
travelers
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travellers
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 rose steadily from just under 500,000 at the beginning of the period, until recording just over a
miillion
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million
tourists
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 in 2015 and converging with the
number
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 of hotel
visitors
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, australia, tourists, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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