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Some people think that printed books are not necessary in the digital era, as all writing can be stored electronically. Others believe that printed books still play an important role in our lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that printed
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 still utilised nowadays in schools and libraries.
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 it is a commonly held belief that they are not important in today's digitalised generation, as
books
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 can be downloaded easily. Others firmly hold the view that printed
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 still have a vital role in our daily lives. One one hand, critics of printed
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 often point
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 it with the technological advancements these days. Which effectively means the whole book could be put in a PDF that does not require finance.
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, storing electronically saves weight and space
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instead
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 of carrying a heavy book to university or a library, you just need a personal device to download the book
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 it. A clear example of
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 can be seen in modern colleges where the majority of students have laptops with them that
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 7-10 digital slides of their courses
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 decade ago, learners
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 from heavy
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 that
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 500 pages.
On the other hand
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, printed
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 are more practical and convenient.
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 is largely because we could highlight an important sentence
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 some professors are still used to them and feel uncomfortable with technology.
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, in order to use digital
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, a device is required, and not all students have the financial ability to purchase
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.
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, a recent study in Japan revealed that 70
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 of university
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students
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 took a long-term loan to attend college.
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, transforming to electronic
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 is not beneficial unless
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 are given to students. In conclusion, there
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 no straightforward answers to the presented question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that original
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 are essential in our lives because
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they are
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 affordable.

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task response
Score: 6. Your answer covers both views and gives an opinion. However, some ideas need more care. For example, a PDF is not always free, and printed books may also cost money. Explain why books are useful beyond being cheap, such as easy reading, no battery, and use in places with poor internet.
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Make your opinion clearer in the start and end. Say directly that printed books will still be needed, even though digital books are useful.
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Use examples that clearly prove your point. The Japan loan example shows that some students have money problems, but it does not clearly show that they cannot buy a device. A better example would be a student who can use a school library book but cannot buy a laptop.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. The main order is clear, but some links between ideas are not smooth. Do not start a new sentence with "Which effectively means". Join it to the sentence before it.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. In the second body paragraph, highlighting, teachers' habits, and money are three different points. Choose one or two and explain them more fully.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences. For example: "Digital books are popular because they are easy to carry and store." Then give one example and explain it.
coherence and cohesion
Check repeated or unclear words. "Original books" should be "printed books", and "university pursuers" should be "university students".
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You discuss both sides and give your own view in the end.
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You use examples about students, devices, and the cost of study.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part shape: start, first view, second view, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as "In addition", "Furthermore", "For instance", and "Consequently".
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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