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Writing Samples
Band 6

** Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email - recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn - explain how your friend could learn this sport - suggest that you both learn this sport together. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear _______,

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Dear Anna, I am writing to share my excitement about joining a running club called “Flow”. I
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started
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 Sunday
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 it has been a rewarding experience. Since you mentioned that you would like to learn a new sport, I highly recommend
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try
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 one. Owners of the club are professional runners and former football players, which brings additional inspiration and joy to
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 learning process. The program is designed to increase basic endurance, develop ankle joint mobility and enhance the work of
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 system. Every new student receives a complimentary check-up session
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 their running abilities and technique will be assessed. The coaches will explain to you
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 aspects of running as stance, respiration, posture and tempo. After completing the first
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 they will allow you to join a group running, which
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 scheduled for Sunday. I would be
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 to train together
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 summer and learn how to run
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. I believe that running is a demanding sport, but joining
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together could keep us motivated and disciplined. Let me know what you think! Have a great evening, Vassa

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task response
You answer all three parts. To make it even better, say more clearly why running is good for Anna, for example, because it is easy to start and can help her feel fit.
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Use more natural words in a few places: say “I started last Sunday”, “the club owners”, “the learning process”, and “group run”.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order: sport, how to learn it, then learning together. Add simple links such as “First”, “Then”, and “Finally” to make the steps easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are very long. Split them into two shorter sentences, so your email is easier to read.
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You give a clear sport choice, explain the club and coaches, and ask Anna to train with you.
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The tone is warm and friendly. “Let me know what you think!” is a good ending for an email to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The email has a good opening, three main parts, and a clear closing.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main job, so the reader can follow your message easily.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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