Developments in technology are causing environmental problems. Some think the solution is for people to adjust to a simpler life while others believe that technology itself can solve these problems. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Environmental concerns have increased
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technological
advancement
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While
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a significant number of
people
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believe that a simple life adjustment is the
solution
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, others argue that the
solution
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can be found with the help of technology itself. I strongly agree that technological
advancement
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can provide a
solution
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that reduces environmental effects because new tools and equipment ensure new precautions that fight against warming and pollution.
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essay will elaborate on both views and my position with relevant arguments and examples. On the one hand, artificial
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technological advancements have irreversibly changed
people
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's lives, forcing them to use more search engines to research and complete their daily tasks. As they are using these AI tools that require a considerable amount of water to cool down, these tools increase the
environment
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's temperature and release toxic gases into the air.
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, these drawbacks cause inevitable environmental issues that degrade the quality of
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and give rise to global warming.
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instance
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AI
companies centers
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spend substantial water to cool down the systems, and they are considering a new
solution
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that relocates the entire systems to the
arctic
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environment
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to reduce the temperature with cold air.
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, the
solution
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is denied by
people
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because it would accelerate global warming
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its detrimental effects on the Arctic areas.
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, technology has negative impacts on the
environment
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, which are hard to solve without
a
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apply
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consideration.
On the other hand
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, new technological
developments
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can provide significant solutions that
optimize
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the system's efficiency and reduce potential damage to the
environment
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.
This
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is because these
developments
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,
such
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as electric vehicles, make a crucial contribution to a decrease in environmental issues, lowering
toxic gases release
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the release of toxic gases
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. Since electric cars powered by electric energy not only lower the expenditures of transportation but
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reduce environmental issues that are caused
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due to
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by
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dependence on fossil fuels.
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, technological
advancement
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ensure
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ensures
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a clean energy alternative to replace older technological damages.
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, Tesla has
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the car market
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driven by traditional engine technologies, forcing car companies to invest in new electric technologies.
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, I
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believe
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that these
developments
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can provide better solutions to improve older technologies' detrimental effects on the
environment
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. In conclusion,
although
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many
people
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believe that
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advancement
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the advancement
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of technology has a negative impact on the
environment
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, which
encourage
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people
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to change their lifestyles to a simpler one, I firmly maintain that these drawbacks of
advacements
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advancements
can be
eleminated
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eliminated
by new technological
developments
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that change the whole system with an efficient and eco-friendly
solution
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task response
Score: 6. Your answer covers all parts of the question, but some ideas are not fully clear or fully true. For example, AI use does not directly make the air hotter. Say that data centres use a lot of power and water, which can add to harm if the power comes from coal or gas.
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Give more space to the first view: people should live more simply. Explain what this means, such as buying less, using less power, taking public transport, and keeping phones or cars for longer. In your first body paragraph, you mostly explain why technology is bad, not why a simpler life is the answer.
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Your second view is stronger. Still, explain that electric cars are not a full answer: they work best when the power comes from clean sources. This would make your opinion more balanced and more convincing.
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Use one clear example and explain it well. The Arctic example is hard to follow and may seem unlikely. A simpler example, such as solar power, wind power, or better public transport, would be safer and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. Your paragraph order is good, but some sentences do not join smoothly. Make each paragraph start with a direct main idea, then give a reason, an example, and a short result.
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat “As a result” too often. Use other simple links: “Therefore”, “This means that”, “For this reason”, or leave the link out when it is not needed.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in each sentence. Some sentences are too long and hard to read. For example, split the sentence about AI tools, water, temperature, and toxic gases into two or three short sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Make key words match. Use “technology”, “technological development”, and “new technology” in a steady way. Also, use the same subject clearly: “data centres”, not “AI companies centers”.
coherence and cohesion
Check basic word forms because they can make links less clear: “artificial intelligence”, “ensure”, “has changed”, “I believe”, “advances”, and “eliminated”.
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You discuss both views and give a clear opinion. Your opinion stays the same from the start to the end.
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You use examples, such as AI data centres and electric cars, to explain your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear four-part shape: introduction, first view, second view, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use clear linking words, such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For instance”, and “In conclusion”.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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