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Nowadays, some cities organise vehicle-free age, during which private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are not allowed in the city centre. Instead, population are encouraged to travel by public transport, including buses and taxis.

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Nowadays, some cities organise
vehicle-free
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a vehicle-free
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age
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day
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, during which private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are not allowed in the city centre.
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population
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the population
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 are encouraged to travel by public
transport
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, including buses and taxis. One of the main advantages of banning
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some cities they have empty streets . If the government start banning
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 for a few
days
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 streets will become quiet, paecfull and free of vehicle
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pollution
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 emissions.
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 is because streets are usually crowded and noisy.
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, traffic jams and car accidents will decrease, quality of the air will be better.
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, it helps to improve the environment and encourages
community
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the community
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 to rely on public transportation
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 of driving.
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, in Uzbekistan, drivers do not use
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 on Saturday and Sunday for the full day. The reason for
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 is that people can relax with their family on weekends. One of the biggest disadvantages of a day without cars is that
public
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 who work for the whole week can't
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 their cars and have to use buses, but sometimes workers can not get to locations.
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 is public transportation may not reach every area.
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,
nation
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a nation
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 can lose
their
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its
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 job, because of
transport
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.
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, in
Dubai
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Dubai,
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 a lot of people may lose their jobs because they can not get to the location without a car, and
in
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during
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 these special days
interferes
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, people work and get their salary normally. In conclusion,
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vehicle-free
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a vehicle-free
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 day can cause some problems for workers and businesses, I believe
they have
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it has
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 more advantages. They help reduce air pollution, decrease traffic, and encourage
public
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the public
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 to
useage
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use
 public
shipment
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transportation
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task response
Score: 5. Your ideas answer the topic, but some are not fully clear. Explain each main point more. For example, say how fewer cars can make city air cleaner and streets safer.
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Your examples are weak because they sound unsure or may not be true. “In Dubai a lot of people may lose their jobs” needs clear facts or a more natural example. Use one simple, believable example instead.
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The bad side needs better support. You say people may lose jobs, but this is too strong. Say that some people may be late for work if buses do not go to their area.
coherence and cohesion
Start with a short introduction that says you will discuss both sides and give your view. This will make the whole essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. In the first body paragraph, focus on the good sides. In the second, focus on the problems for workers, shops, and people who live far from bus stops.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to understand because of word order and missing words. For example, change “banning transport in apply some cities they have empty streets” to “Banning private vehicles can make city streets empty and quiet.”
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links in the right way: “First”, “Also”, “However”, “Because of this”, and “For example”. Do not repeat “As a result” too often.
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You give both good and bad sides, and you give your own view in the end.
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Your main good points are clear: less noise, less dirty air, fewer traffic jams, and fewer accidents.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear three-part shape: good sides, bad sides, and a final view.
coherence and cohesion
You use links such as “This is because”, “As a result”, “Moreover”, “For instance”, and “In conclusion”.
Your opinion

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