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The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given pie chart and table demonstrate the
numbers
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number
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 of people in Australia
according to
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 different places and nationalities.
Overall
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, it is noticed that the majority of
population
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the population
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 by Australians in both the chat and the table and the rest
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such
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, such
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us
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as
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 British, New Zealanders, Chinese, Dutch,
other
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others
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, all
of them
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apply
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have a small impact on the distribution.
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Also
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 the urban areas
seems
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seem
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 to have a lot of population compared to the rural
area
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areas
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. Australian nationality
have
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has
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 the highest figures in both the chart and the table of 73% percentage.
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,
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apply
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 the other and British have a small impact on the numbers by 14% and 8% respectively. In terms of the Dutch,
and
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apply
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Chinese, and New
Zealanders
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Zealanders,
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 they have a very small number of 1% and 2% and 3% respectively. The Urban areas cover 86 % of the population
,
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; however
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, the rural areas have only 14 % .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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