The given chart illustrates the percentage of four different recycled materials between 1982 and 2010 in a country.

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The chart depicts
four
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the four
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selected materials ( paper & cardboard, glass containers, aluminium cans, plastic) recycling rate between 1982 and 2010. 
Overall
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, paper & cardboard and glass containers
recycling percentage
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is relatively
below
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lower
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than
aluminium
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that of aluminium
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cans
with
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, with
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a slight increase and plastic
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, which
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is remained
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remains
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unchanged.
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, on top of the illustration located paper & cardboard
per cent constituent
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constituted
about 65% and reached over to 80%
which
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, which
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is the highest percentage during 1982-2010.
In
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the same time
glass
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, glass
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containers
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container
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recycling figures slightly declined from 50% to 40%, after the line increased 60%. Looking at the aluminium cans gradually rise over the period without any reduction from 0% to 45%.
While
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,
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plastics
not
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did not
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shifted
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shift
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and
keeps
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remained lower than 10% from 1990 to 2010.

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