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some people think that hosting an international sporting event is beneficial for a country while others disagree. Do the advantages of hosting major sporting events outweigh the disadvantages?

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I think hosting
big
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a big
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 sporting event that
people
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 come to from different
countries
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 of the
world
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,
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apply
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 has some advantages for
hosting
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the hosting
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 place. With the help of these large sporting activities,
countries
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 gain
large
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a large
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 amount of money and advertise their
cities
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 and cultures to
whole
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the whole
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world
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.
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, when many
people
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 visit the hosting country and travel around the
cities
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, they spend a lot of money;
moreover
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, they contribute to the government's budget with their expenses.
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, the USA has sold a lot of tickets for football matches and increased its income considerably
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touristic
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tourist
 activities during
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World
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the World
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 Cup 2026.
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, the government and FIFA have been investing
to
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in
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 many influencers,
holywood
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Hollywood
 stars, and
advertisement
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advertisements
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 in order to
attact
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attract
 tourists' attention and advertise their cultures, foods,
traditional
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and traditional
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 activities to
whole
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the whole
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world
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.
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, these major
events
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 have big
potentials
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potential
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 to harm
environment
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the environment
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, and
social
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the social
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 life of natives. On the one
hand
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hand,
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countries
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 gain money and advertise themselves to
whole
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the whole
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world
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,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 tourists pollute their
cities
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, streets, and make
noises
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noise
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 and
disturbs
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disturb
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 natives. Some local
people
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 don't like too much noise, crowdness or polluted streets in their
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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,
although
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 their country is getting more popular around the
world
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.
Consequently
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, even though
potential
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there is potential
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 income and
increasing
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an increasing
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 popularity of the
countries
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 that host international sporting
events
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, governments should control these
events
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 to protect their
cities
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 and
local
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the peace of local people
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people
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's peace. If
countries
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 can manage these major
events
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 carefully without letting travellers pollute streets or make
noises
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noise
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, they can grow their economies and advertise their
cities
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 and cultures
while
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 their local
people
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 support them during these
events
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.

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Task response
Estimated score: 6. Your main answer is there, but make it more direct in the first paragraph. Say clearly: “The advantages outweigh the disadvantages, as long as the event is managed well.”
Task response
Explain the money point more fully. For example, say how visitors pay for hotels, food, travel, and tickets, and how this can help local jobs.
Task response
Your USA World Cup 2026 example is not a safe example because it is in the future. Use a past event, or make it a general example. Also, do not say that tourists give money straight to the government; they mainly spend money in local shops and services.
Task response
Give one clear reason why the bad points are smaller or can be controlled. For example, limits on crowd size, more bins, public travel, and rules about noise can reduce these problems.
Coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. In paragraph 2, the point changes from visitor spending to ads and famous people. These could be split, or linked more clearly.
Coherence and cohesion
Use simpler sentence forms in some places. Long sentences with many ideas can make the meaning less clear. Write one idea, then explain it in the next sentence.
Coherence and cohesion
Make the end stronger by repeating your answer to the question. At present, it says governments should control events, but it should also clearly say that the good points are greater than the bad points.
Task response
You answer the question clearly. You say that the good points can be greater if the event is well managed.
Task response
You give both sides: money and world attention, then noise, waste, and problems for local people.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an end.
Coherence and cohesion
You use clear linking words such as “Firstly”, “For instance”, “Furthermore”, “In contrast”, and “Consequently”.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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