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Nowadays most people read books online and there is decline in number of people reading paperback books. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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Introduction
Recently, many
reader
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readers
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 prefer digital
books
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rather
 than traditional
book
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books
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paperbacks
provid spicial
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provide special
 enjoyable and economic benefits,
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online
book
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books
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 offer convenience , accessibility and flexibility.
This
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 essay discusse advantages and disadvantages of online
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On the one hand, online
books
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provid
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provide
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covenience
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convenience
, accessibility, and flexibility. Now,
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 of
books
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 avalible online
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 different
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numerous fields
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Furthermore
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 these platforms
pffer
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offer
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affordable
 price for
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subscription
 regardless locations, which that encourge number of reader sinificantly.
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on
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 printing and
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publishing paperback
books
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 industry expeirence decline in
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sales
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companies
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 the workers.
Conclusion
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conclusion
, despite the
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economic negative
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book
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believe
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books
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more
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such
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accessible
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being accessible
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 and flexible.

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task response
Score: 5. Your answer is clear, but the ideas need more detail. Explain why online books are easy to use, for example that one phone can hold many books and can be used when people travel.
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Add one clear example for each side. For the bad side, say that some readers may get eye pain or may miss the feel of a real book.
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The bad side is mostly about book shops and jobs. This is a good point, but add a bad side for readers too. This will make the answer more full and fair.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Put one main idea in each body paragraph. Start with the idea, then give a reason, then give an example.
coherence and cohesion
Some links are not clear, such as “which that encourage number of reader”. Use short, clear links: “This can make more people read.”
coherence and cohesion
Your last part gives your view, but the task asks for good and bad sides. End by summing up both sides first, then give your view in one short line.
coherence and cohesion
Use full sentences and check word forms. Many spelling and grammar errors make the flow hard to follow, for example “many readers prefer”, “paperback books provide”, and “sales are falling”.
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You answer both parts: the good side and the bad side of online books.
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Your main ideas are on topic: ease, low cost, and the loss of jobs in paper book work.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end.
coherence and cohesion
You use simple link words such as “On the one hand”, “Furthermore”, “On the other hand”, and “In conclusion”.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital library
  • e-reader
  • blue light
  • paper conservation
  • tactile interaction
  • memory retention
  • portability
  • collectible
  • eye comfort
  • sustainability
  • immersive experience
  • distractive technology
  • e-ink display
  • multimedia features
  • reading habits
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