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Band 1

Nowadays most people read books online and there is decline in number of people reading paperback books. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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Recenty many people prefer reading e-book rether than hard
book
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books
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paperbooks
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paper books
 have econimics benefit, online
books
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 have more
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, such
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 as
avalabilites
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availability
 and
flixibiltes
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flexibility
. On the
hand
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, there are several advantages
come
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soft
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book
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books
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following
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firstly
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 book price
reduce
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reduces
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 significantly
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because the printing
pudget
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budget
 was removed .
secondly
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 online
books
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 avalible in different platforms
probably
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, that means
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reader
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readers
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 can find
books
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 wherever
thay
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they
 are,
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 mumber of readers
rise
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rises
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 considerably.
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for
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example
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 now
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reader
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readers
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 have subscribtion in at least one
applicathoin
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application
 that provides noumers
books
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 with affordeble price.
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, many
disadvanages apear espcially
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disadvantages appear especially
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printing
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the printing
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 and paperback
books
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 industries,
the
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 number of
reader
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 fall dramatically. as
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 many worker lost their jobs. In
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conclusion
, online
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books
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book
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 readers
supeir
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surpass
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hardbook
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hardcover
reader
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,
that
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apply
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because accesabilites and
flixibilty
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flexibility
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task response
Score: 5. Answer the full question in a more even way. Your good side has more detail, but the bad side has only one main point about jobs. Add other bad points, such as eye pain, less focus, or the need for a phone, power, and the internet.
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Make each main point clear, then explain it, then give a short example. For example, say why lower prices help readers, and say how job loss affects people.
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Your ending should not only say online books are better. It should sum up both sides and give your view in a clear way.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 4. Put one clear main idea in each paragraph. The last body part should have two or more full ideas, not only short lines.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links. Write “On the one hand” and “On the other hand”. Do not use “as a result” too often.
coherence and cohesion
Make the order easy to follow: opening; two good points; two bad points; ending. Use full sentences to join ideas.
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You talk about both good and bad sides of online books.
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You give a clear good point: online books can cost less and can be read in many places.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an opening, two main parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use links such as “firstly”, “for example”, “on the other hand”, and “in conclusion”.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital library
  • e-reader
  • blue light
  • paper conservation
  • tactile interaction
  • memory retention
  • portability
  • collectible
  • eye comfort
  • sustainability
  • immersive experience
  • distractive technology
  • e-ink display
  • multimedia features
  • reading habits
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