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In many countries, plastic containers have became more common than ever and are used by food and drink companies. Do you think the adventages outweight the disadventage.

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Due to
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continious
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continuous
 production of
plastic
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 containers,
plastic
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have
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has
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 now
became
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become
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 more common
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then
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than
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 before, which is being used by many food and drink
business
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businesses
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.
Although
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this
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 trend has several benefits, I
belive
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believe
 the drawbacks
outweight
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outweigh
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 them in
long
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the long
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 run. There are many drawbacks
of
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to
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 using
plastic
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.
Firstly
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, because of
continious
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continuous
 use of
plastic
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 waste and not properly recycling the
plastic
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 waste can cause both water and air pollution
which
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, which
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 is very
harmfull
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harmful
 for both aquatic animals and
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 for human being itself.
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, a company named
zazi
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,
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apply
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 was desposing there
plastic
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 waste directly into the river without proper treatment
,
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; for
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due to
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this
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 reason
companies
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, companies
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now
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have now
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has
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been closed by the government.
Secondly
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,
using
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use
 of
plastic
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product
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products
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 can affect human health
,
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.
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, use of hot items in
plastic
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 cups will melt the cup from the inside
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, which
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this
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 will release some
harmfull
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harmful
plastic
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 molecules into that hot item
, it
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. It
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 can
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 cause cancer
,
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when drinking in inproper way.
Moreover
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,
Over manufacturing
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over-manufacturing
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of
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apply
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plastic
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product
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products
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 without proper recycling will impact
on
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apply
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the ecosystem. Some
adventages
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advantages
 of using
plastic
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product
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products
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 are
they
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that they
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 are durable and
are
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very easy to transport. As
plastic
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product
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products
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 are very
convinent
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convenient
 and
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 they have
long
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a long
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 life period
from
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compared to
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 other
material
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materials
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.
Furthermore
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,
plastic
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product
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products
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 can be
manufacture
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manufactured
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 very easily and are very cheap. Which
menas
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means
 that
plastic
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product
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products
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 are very cheap in
market
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the market
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 compared to other metal items.
For Example
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, a chocolate company named
pie
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Pie
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 was selling
there
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their
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 chocolate in metal
container
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containers
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, later they shifted to sell
there
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their
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 chocolate in
plastic
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container
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containers
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,
this
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 change has increased
there
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their
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 profit by 25% in
there
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their
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 manufacturing.
To conclude
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, despite some
advantage
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advantages
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 of using
plastic
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product
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products
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, which are
convinent
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convenient
, durable, and
is
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apply
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very cheap to manufacture.
Drawback
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 have more weight
then
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 adventage in
long
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the long
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 run, which are
harmfull
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harmful
 for human beings and aquatic life
both
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,
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 and
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 can destory whole ecosystem.

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task response
Score: 5. Your main answer is clear, but some ideas need more detail. Explain more clearly how plastic from food and drink firms leads to harm, and why this harm is greater than the good points.
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Use real, clear examples if you can. The examples about “zazi” and “pie” may not be known to the reader. A general example, such as plastic bottles in rivers or cheap food packs, may work better.
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Keep your ideas close to the question. Talk about plastic containers for food and drinks, not plastic in all uses.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Put one main idea in each body part. For example: Body 1: harm to nature. Body 2: harm to health. Body 3: good points.
coherence and cohesion
Make links between sentences more clear. For example: “This can harm fish and other water life. It can also harm people when they eat fish from this water.”
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat the same idea many times. You say plastic waste, poor reuse, and harm to the ecosystem in more than one place. Say each point once, then add a reason or an example.
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You give a clear view: the bad points are stronger than the good points.
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You cover both sides: harm to nature and health, then low cost and easy use.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, main parts, and an end.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Firstly”, “Secondly”, “Moreover”, and “To conclude” help the reader follow your ideas.
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