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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the present time, the methods to test
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acknowledgement
 are moving. Recently, there
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 a trend which is shifting from written
exam
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exams
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steadily
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 evaluated assessment. It is agreed that the only effective way to assess a student's performance
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 formal examinations. Analysing the needed qualification for preparing
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 a test,
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 the pressure to finish
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 the given
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 will prove
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This is only an introduction, so it does not fully answer the question yet. Add two body parts. Explain why exams test knowledge, and why course work or projects may not show each student's own work.
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Give clear examples. For example, an exam can test what a student knows in a set time, while a project may get help from parents, friends, or the internet.
coherence and cohesion
Make the main idea more clear. Your last line has two points, but they are not fully explained. Use a clear plan: first body part about exams; second body part about course work and projects; final part with your view.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words to join ideas: 'First', 'Also', 'However', 'For example', and 'In the end'.
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Some word choices make the meaning hard to follow. Say 'ways to test students' instead of 'methods to test acknowledge'. Say 'continuous assessment' or 'regular assessment' instead of 'steadily evaluated assessment'.
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You give a clear view: you agree that formal exams are the best way to test students.
coherence and cohesion
Your first part has a simple order: topic, your view, then two main points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized assessment
  • criteria
  • benchmark
  • performance comparison
  • evaluation under pressure
  • simulate
  • real-world scenarios
  • time management
  • comprehensive coverage
  • subject grasp
  • objectivity
  • lifelong learning
  • engagement
  • practical application
  • skill development
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • individualized feedback
  • student well-being
  • exam stress
  • academic environment
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