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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016

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The graph presents data on the use of public transit in one country by
age
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, average, and domicile in 2016. One of the biggest trends is that both large cities and other
residents
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 recorded the highest percentage in the
age
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 groups below 45. In the other
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 category, the figure increased substantially in the 16-30
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group
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 to approximately 28%.
While
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 the
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group
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 0-15 saw the same percentage as the
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group
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 31-45, which is about 15%. The majority of large-city
residents
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 who used public transport were between 31 and 45, accounting for almost 70% of
this
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age
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 range.
However
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, the
share
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 decreased significantly to about 55% in the 16-30
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 category and declined gradually to 40% in the 0-15
age
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group
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.
By comparison
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, the older
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, 46-76, experienced entirely different proportions. The percentage of other
residents
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 dropped gradually to nearly 10% in the 46- 60
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group
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.
Whereas
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 the next
age
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 bracket, 61-75, saw a 20% increase in
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, the
last
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 one (76+) fell sharply to approximately 5%. Unlike the large city
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’ association ages 46-60, whose
share
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 rose above 40%, the 61-75 cohort's
share
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 declined sharply to 10%. The 76+
age
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 range fell to approximately 5%.
Overall
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, public transport use was considerably higher among
residents
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 of large cities than among other
residents
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 across most
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 groups.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, residents, group, share with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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