The graph below shows the information on waste disposal in a European country from 2005 to 2008.

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The graph illustrates the data on trash disposal in European cities between 2005 and 2008.
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, landfill shows the highest proportion over the period, but it is gradually being replaced by dumping in the sea.
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in the sea had the largest number among all the various methods. In 2005, landfil was the most common method of waste disposal by 20080 million
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starting to decrease to 20000 million
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in 2006
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however
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of 2008, landfills reached their lowest recorded level at 200 in 2006.
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the burning method fluctuated during the four years, at the begining burning waste disposal recorded the smallest number by 200 in 2005,
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it increased again in 2006 by 2089, after
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fall again in 2008 by 200.
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, dumping in the ocean showed the largest number in 2008, with 298million
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in 2005 and 2006 were under
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3774
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