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Band 7

Write a letter to your friend about a job opportunity you came across that they might find interesting. In your letter, you should: give some details about the job mention how you came across the job opportunity explain why you feel the job would be suitable for your friend

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Dear Archie, I hope you're doing well. I came across a job opportunity on LinkedIn that immediately made me think of you. I'd like to share more details about it.
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, the role is a Senior Business Analyst at BMO. They are mainly looking for a person who has five to seven years of experience in the same field.
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 role is hybrid and located in Toronto. Not only does it provide a good wage , but it
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 has a lot of personal and professional benefits. I was randomly surfing on Linkedin and one of my colleagues from another team posted
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 job. You're the one whom I think of when I look at the post. The reason why I feel that you would be
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 you're a pro in that domain and have developed a robust skill set , including communicating with stakeholders, analysing data and gathering project requirements. I think you can easily outperform in
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 role and manage it effortlessly. I'm sure you will find
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 opportunity well , and let me know if you need a referral or any other help. I would love to do it. Hope to see you soon. Best regards, Taylor

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task response
Score: 7. All main parts are there. Add one more clear point about the job, such as what the person will do each day or when to apply.
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Use more natural words: say “a good fit,” not “a best fit”; “find this opportunity useful,” not “find this opportunity well.”
coherence and cohesion
Score: 7. Put the LinkedIn part in its own short paragraph. This will make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Some lines are not clear. For example, write: “When I saw the post, I thought of you right away.” Also, use fewer long sentences.
task response
You give the job name, place, work type, and the work skills needed. You also say how you found it and why it fits your friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end. The greeting and closing are good for a friend.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • job opening
  • vacant position
  • part-time role
  • full-time position
  • job advertisement
  • recruitment website
  • company’s careers page
  • main responsibilities
  • customer service skills
  • relevant experience
  • flexible working hours
  • competitive salary
  • career development
  • gain practical experience
  • work independently
  • work as part of a team
  • submit an application
  • update your CV
  • meet the requirements
  • apply before the deadline
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