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The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

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The table given below illustrates the
consumption
Use synonyms
 of fast food in Melbourne between 2005 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 day.
Overall
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, people
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
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 consumed hamburger was the highest.
While
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 salad's
'
Punctuation problem
apply
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consumption
Use synonyms
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 the lowest.
Also
Linking Words
,
fried
Check wording
the consumption of fried
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 rice and
noodles's
Correct subject-verb agreement
noodles was
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consumption
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 were almost
low
Rephrase
as low
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 as
salad
Correct pronoun usage
that of salad
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 in the first years. But after two decades, people changed their food
consumption
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, started actively eating a salad and surged
it's
Fix the agreement mistake
their
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consumption
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 data. m m

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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