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Band 6.5

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.

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This
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 bar chart shows the expenditure by different
income
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 groups in the UK for fast food items like hamburgers, fish&chips and pizza. And the amount is
massured
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measured
 in million pounds.
Overall
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, the
high
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high-income
income
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class
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 spends much more money on fast food than any other
income
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class
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.
This
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 chart
also
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show
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shows
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 that hamburgers are the clear favourite item to purchase for the high and the
avarage
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average
income
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class
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. The
low
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low-income
income
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class
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on
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, on
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 the other
side has
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hand
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favours
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, favours
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 fish&chips over hamburgers and pizzas, but compared to the other two
groups
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groups,
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 it still consumes and spends less on fish&chips than the other two do. Pizza
which
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, which
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 might be a
suprise
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surprise
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 for some
people
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people,
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 is not the favourite but actually ranks the lowest in almost all three groups except the
high
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high-income
income
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class
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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this
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 illustrates clearly that dependent on the financial
capacity
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capacity,
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there will be
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money is
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 spent money of take away food
and
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, and
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 all
income
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 classes eat
them
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it
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 in the
united kingdom
Capitalize the proper name
United Kingdom
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, class with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure on fast food
  • income group
  • high-income earners
  • middle-income households
  • low-income consumers
  • overall trend
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest amount
  • spend considerably more
  • spending rose with income
  • spending declined as income increased
  • popular food item
  • a noticeable difference
  • a significant gap
  • fish and chips
  • hamburgers
  • pizza
  • measured in millions of pounds
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