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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The depicted
table
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 delineates the information about six
cities
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cities'
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 underground
railway
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systems
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, how these
systems
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 performed and
many
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the many
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kilometers
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 of route they achieved.
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, how many
passangers
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passengers
 does each train
carried
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.
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overall
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 summary of the given
table
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 quite vividly illustrates that, when each
city
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 has launched its
railway
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systems
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, how many routes
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they have taken and how many passengers each
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city
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city's
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railway
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 carried and delivered each year. In
detail
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 as we
scrutinize
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 the given
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table
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table,
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 it demonstrates that
,
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 London is the first
city
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which opened
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 the underground
railway
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systems
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 very early
than the
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compared to
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 other cities
and
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 it served over 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of distance
far
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, far
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 more than the other
cities
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cities'
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 railways
,
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. While
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while
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 Paris is the one
city
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that is
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 worth mentioning
which
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 railways carried over 1191 million people
on it
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in a year. The
city
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 which opened its rail service system
the
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last
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or the latest
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is Los Angeles
in
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, in
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 the given
table
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which
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, which
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 has
done
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covered
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 28
kilometers
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 of route and served 50 million individuals.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, railway, systems, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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