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You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part-time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter explain why you want to reduce your working hours say which hours you would like to work discuss how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

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Dear
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 Smith, I am writing to inform you that I would like to initiate part-time professional courses to improve my skills in my current field. I would be reducing my working hours temporarily, only for the duration of the course. I would prefer to work four days a week, from Tuesday to Friday, and keep Monday free for classes and assignments.
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, I need to leave early only on
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 Wednesday of the month for my in-person assignment. The new qualification could help me to take on more responsibilities and contribute to future projects.
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, I will get to enhance my marketing skills,
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, it will boost our sales and bring us more clients.
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 course provides me
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 internship for 2 weeks in an international company
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 will give me insight
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 a broader platform. I will make sure that urgent work is completed on time and will be available by email for important issues. Your sincerely, Kiranbir Kaur

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task response
Make the work plan more clear. Say how you will deal with work on Monday and who can help when you leave early.
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Keep the ideas about the company more direct. Explain in a clear way how the new skills will help your team and its work.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links between ideas. For example: “Also”, “Because of this”, and “In addition”. Do not join too many ideas in one long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use the right closing: “Yours sincerely,” because you know Mr. Smith’s name. Put it on its own line before your name.
task response
You explain why you need less work time, say the days and times you want, and show how the course can help the company.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear order: your reason, your new work time, the help for the company, and your promise about urgent work.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reduce my working hours
  • study on a part-time basis
  • professional development course
  • upgrade my skills
  • gain up-to-date knowledge
  • practical training
  • course timetable
  • attend weekly classes
  • complete assignments
  • temporary arrangement
  • four-day working week
  • flexible working schedule
  • maintain productivity
  • meet deadlines
  • urgent tasks
  • remain available by email
  • take on additional responsibilities
  • contribute to future projects
  • benefit the company
  • relevant qualification
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