Creative artists should be given the freedom to express their ideas (through words, pictures, music, or films). However, some people think the government should impose certain restrictions on them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, it has been observed that many
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produce a variety of works which include unconventional ideas.
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some individuals believe that creative
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should have total
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, others think that the government should set boundaries on them. I partially agree with
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view because
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need
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to create, but some rules are necessary to prevent harm.
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essay will examine how
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can be balanced with sensible restrictions. On the one hand,
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should be given
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to express their ideas without heavy limits. In fact, art allows people to think deeply and explore new concepts. Not only does creative
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help culture grow, but it
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allows unique talents to develop.
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, many famous painters and writers produced great works only when they were free to express themselves.
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, the government must set boundaries when art causes clear harm to young people.
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means that works involving extreme violence or dangerous habits should have strict age ratings. A prime example is when recent studies showed that many teenagers try to copy harmful media
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, basic restrictions are necessary to protect traditional values and maintain social order. In conclusion, I believe that creative
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should have
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in most cases, but reasonable limits are needed to protect society.
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, I highly recommend implementing smart guidelines that support
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safeguarding public health.

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Explain your own view more fully. You say you partly agree, but show more clearly which limits you accept and which limits you do not accept. For example, say that age checks are fair, but stopping art only because it is new or unpopular is not fair.
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Give more real and clear support for each main point. "Many famous painters and writers" is too general. Name one writer, film, song, or type of art, and explain how freedom helped it.
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Be careful with the claim about "recent studies" and teenagers copying media. It is not explained or shown. Either give a clear example or use a less strong claim, such as: "Some young people may copy harmful acts they see online or in films."
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The point about "traditional values" does not fully match the point about harm to young people. Focus on one clear reason for rules, such as child safety, direct harm, or hate. This will make your view more exact.
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Develop each paragraph with one extra step: state the point, explain why it matters, give an example, and link it back to your view. At present, some ideas end too soon.
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Use links that show the exact relation between ideas. For example, after the point about violent films, add: "For this reason, age ratings are better than a full ban." This makes the balance in your view stronger.
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Your conclusion repeats the main view well, but "I highly recommend" sounds less natural for this essay. A more direct end is: "Therefore, governments should protect people from clear harm without stopping artists from sharing new ideas."
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Your view is clear from the start: artists need freedom, but rules may be needed when there is harm. You answer both sides of the question.
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The main ideas stay on the topic. The points about free art and age limits are relevant.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: introduction, one paragraph for each side, and a conclusion.
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Linking words such as "On the one hand", "On the other hand", "For instance", and "Consequently" make the flow easy to follow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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