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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportin

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The line graph illustrates the proportion of the population living in urban areas in four Asian countries, the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and Indonesia
between
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 1970 and 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the percentage of people living in cities increased in all four countries over the 70-year period.
Malaysia
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 experienced the most rapid
growth
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 and is predicted to have the highest
urbanization
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 rate by 2040.
In contrast
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,
Thailand
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 had the lowest proportion throughout,
although
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 all countries are expected to see continued
growth
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. In 1970, approximately 30% of the population in both
Malaysia
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 and the
Philippines
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 lived in cities, which was significantly higher than
Indonesia
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in Indonesia
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 at around 15% and
Thailand
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 at just under 20%. Over the next 50 years,
Malaysia
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 saw the steepest rise, reaching about 70% in 2010 and projected to climb to just over 80% by 2040. Indonesia
also
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 experienced substantial
growth
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, overtaking the
Philippines
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 around 2000, and is forecast to reach roughly 62% by 2040. The
Philippines
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 began with the same 30% as
Malaysia
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 in 1970, but its
growth
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 was more moderate. After peaking at around 45% in 1990, it dipped slightly to 40% in 2010 before recovering to an estimated 55% in 2040.
Thailand
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 started with the lowest figure and, despite a steady increase, remained the least
urbanized
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 country. Its proportion grew to about 32% by 2020 and is predicted to reach just under 50% by 2040

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Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia, thailand, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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