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The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart compares the data
of
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water
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 usage by several sources in Australia in 2004, and the bar chart illustrates the percentages of dwelling
water
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 consumption by five categories in
this
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 country in 2004.
It is clear that
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 residential usage played a dominant role in
water
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 consumption
and
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 the most
water
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 was used in bathrooms in residential life. Obviously,
water
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 used by houses accounted for over half of the consumption (57%), followed by apartments, which used 13% of total
water
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. Meanwhile, industry and business together consumed nearly
one fifth
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one-fifth
 of
water
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, recording 11% and 10% respectively.
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, only 6% of it went to
government
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the government
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and
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 3% was allocated to others. In daily life, about 28% of residential
water
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 was consumed in bathrooms,
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 the gardens slightly trailed behind at 27%. Washing clothes and flasing toilet were
also
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 important ways to use
water
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, comprising a quarter and 15% respectively.
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, people used
least
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the least
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water
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 in kitchens with a percentage of just 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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