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The two graphs below show the average hours of daily sunshine and temperature throughout the year in two cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
two line
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two-line
 graph illustrates the
overall
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temperature
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 and
sunshine
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 in two cities over one
year
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.
Overall
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,
In
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in
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 terms of high
temperature
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 ,
Darwin
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 showed more than
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melbourne
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Melbourne
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.
Whereas
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 , for daytime ,
Melbourne
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 has more
sunshine
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 recorded throughout the
year
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.
To begin
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 with,in Australia ,
Darwin
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 City
initially
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 scored low temperatures in startin
year
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 ,
this
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 figure rose up inthe mid of the
year
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and
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, and
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finally
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 it dropped to 22 degrees Celsius
at the
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end
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 of the
year
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 .
Similarly
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 ,
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temperature
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the temperature
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 for
Melbourne
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 was very low compared to
Darwin
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.
it
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It
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also
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 increased
mid
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in the middle
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 of the
year
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, as
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as well
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and Melbourne
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melbourne
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 and reached
same
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the same
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temperature
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at the
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end
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 of the
year
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. In terms of
sunshine
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,
Darwin
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 City had less daytime
initially
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,
while
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Melbourne
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 had more
sunshine
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 on january,The
darwin
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 showed incrase in day time mid of the
year
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 and
then
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 fell to less than 8 hours of
sunshne
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sunshine
at the
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end
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.
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. In
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in contrast
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,
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Melbourne,
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Melbourne's
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sunshine
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 timing was reduced in
the
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apply
show examples
mid-
year
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 and rose
up
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to
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 about 10 hours a day
at the
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end
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 of the
year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, initially, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, sunshine, year, darwin, melbourne, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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