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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by theis annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below depicts the number of households in the United States across five annual
income
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 groups in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, a
group
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 with $100,000 or more experienced a slight decline before rising sharply and becoming the largest
group
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 in 2015.
While
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,
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apply
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 the $50,000 -$74,999
group
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 remained unchanged in three different years and the $75.000-$99,999
group
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 consistently had the lowest figure. In 2007, almost 30
million
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 households earned $100,000 or
more
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more,
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 followed by approximately 27
million
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 in the $25,000 and $49,999
group
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and
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, and
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 25
million
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 households earned less than $25,000. By 2011, the change in $25,000-$49,000 and residents
in
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with incomes of
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 less than $25,000
income
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 increased gradually.
As a result
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, both
surpassing
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surpassed
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 the highest
income
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group
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which
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, which
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it
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apply
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fell marginally
in
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apply
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this
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 year. The two groups had almost identical figures. Four years later, the two smallest
income
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group
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groups
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 showed
unchanged
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no change
.
Similarly
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, higher
income
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 groups earning $50,000-$74,999 and $75,000-$99,999 remained relatively stable in three different years.
On the other hand
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, the wealthiest
group
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 climbed sharply above 30
million
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 residents, making it the largest
income
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group
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, group, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • households
  • annual income
  • distribution
  • income brackets
  • trend
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • increase/decrease
  • financial crisis
  • middle-class
  • high-income
  • low-income
  • economic factors
  • median income
  • inflation-adjusted
  • fiscal policy
  • recession
  • wealth disparity
  • purchasing power
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