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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

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This
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 line
graph
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 shows the
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amount
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number of
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 tourists in millions
,
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apply
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that
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who
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 have been visiting a Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017.
This
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 line
graph
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 differentiates between
travelers
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travellers
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 staying on the
island
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or
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and
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 coming on a cruise ship. What stands out is
,
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apply
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 that
initially
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 more people have been staying on the
island
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 and the numbers grew from 2010 until 2015, after that the number of visitors decreased.
On the other hand
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, the
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amount
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number
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 of tourists
that
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who
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 came staying by cruise
ship
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ships
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 was very low in 2015.
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 the demand grew over the years until
in
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, in
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2016
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2016,
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 it surpassed the
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amount
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number of
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 people staying on the
island
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.
Therefore
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, the
overall
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amount
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 of tourists grew steadily since 2015
and
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, and
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 the
graph
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 illustrates that between 2016 and 2017 the number reached a new peak. In conclusion, the line
graph
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 points out that the
overall
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 tourism has been growing since 2015 and has reached its peak with a total
amount
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 of 3.5
mio
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million
 people in 2017. The
Carribian
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Caribbean
island
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 is very popular and is becoming a favourite destination point for vacation.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, amount, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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