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Nowadays the use of online books is on the rise and conventional books is on decline. Do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
Children nowadays have adapted to the use of the
internet
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 specifically in order to consume media.
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, they use it to find any type of information that they may require
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such
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 as literature.
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 the
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rise
 of online
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 in recent years i wholeheartedly agree that they are replacing traditional
books
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 as the primary medium
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 reading literature.
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 fact i think the benefits heavily outweigh the negatives
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 the ease to access said information and
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 the low prices to do so.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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,
i
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 would like to address how easy it is to find
books
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 online.
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 you launch your browser and just search for it as a
pdf
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 file, and there you have it. But
on the other hand
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, physical ones require locating and obtaining, which usually is quite a hassle
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 for those who want to dive straight into reading.
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, obtaining a piece of media online is
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 easier
time wise
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time-wise
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, they
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 priced
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 lower compared to their alternative. To exemplify, we have the low costs of production, you do not require any physical materials
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, which
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 often leads to them being
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 cheaper. We could even argue that some could even be pirated,
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 not being morally correct, it still makes them free to those who do not have the liberty to make
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 purchases. In conclusion, e-
books
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 offer a
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more responsible financial decision when it comes to the prices, which in turn
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more solid.
Conclusion
To
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, online
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 are
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 more convenient compared to their alternative.
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 the sudden spike in interest is definitely not
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 error but a sign of future changes. I am willing to say that they will completely take over in the next couple of years as technology continues to improve.

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task response
Answer the exact question more fully. The question asks if online books are rising while paper books are falling. Explain why this change is happening, and also say whether paper books will still have a place for some readers.
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Your first example says people can search for a PDF. This is clear, but it is not always legal or safe. Use a stronger example, such as buying an e-book in an online store or borrowing one from a library app.
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Build each main point more. For easy access, explain that people can get a book at any time and carry many books on one phone or tablet. For cost, explain why no printing, paper, or shipping can lower the price.
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Avoid using piracy as support for your main view. It weakens your point because it is against the law. Focus on legal free books, low-cost e-books, and online libraries instead.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and hold many ideas. Break them into shorter sentences. This will make your meaning more direct and easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat the same ending words in every body part, such as “To conclude” and “In conclusion”. Use the last sentence of each part to link the reason back to your view.
coherence and cohesion
Use more natural links between ideas. For example: “In addition”, “As a result”, “This means that”, and “For this reason”. Do not use “But on the other hand” unless you are giving a real opposite point.
coherence and cohesion
Make the ending match your main view without adding a very strong new claim. Saying online books will “completely take over” is too absolute. Say that they are likely to become more common, while paper books may remain popular for some people.
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Your view is clear from the start: you agree that online books are taking the place of paper books. You give two main reasons: easy access and lower cost.
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The essay stays on the topic. The examples about searching online and lower production cost help explain your points.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: an opening, two main body parts, and an ending. Words such as “Firstly”, “Secondly”, “For example”, and “To conclude” help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Each body part has one main idea, so the reader can understand the flow of the essay easily.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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