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Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the area of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the problem and give solutions ?

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Introduction
Education
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 standards are often a subject of debate; in recent periods droped in educational
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leads to an increase in literacy and numeracy in an area.
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Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, many people can not contenuie thier high
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 because of eligibility, which prevents them to contienue to the learning.
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 is considered a problem that leads to
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increased percentage
 of literacy and numeracy among the population, which affects society,
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 as increasing poverty and increasing crime between adolecence.
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,
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 is not about finding a job , but about growing up in your whole life.
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, a colleague of mine , some of them with PHD,
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 others only master's degree, I can see the difference between them in the way they talk , the way they think, and
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, how they make decisions.
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The government play a crucial role in
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 issue promote learning. It must be clear to promote our communities. The government should emphsis on deacrease the criteria, and consider
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 as a right for all people in our society.
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 university is essential to solve
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 issue by encouraging the students

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task response
Answer the question more clearly. The topic says that literacy and numeracy have gone down, but your essay says they have gone up. Keep the same main idea from start to end.
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Discuss the problem in a clear way. Explain why reading, writing, and maths skills may fall, for example poor school funds, too many students in one class, or less time for reading at home.
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Give full solutions. Explain how schools, parents, and the government can help, such as teacher training, small classes, free books, extra maths help, and early support for weak students.
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Your example about people with PhDs and master’s degrees does not directly show a fall in literacy or numeracy. Use an example that is closer to school reading, writing, or maths.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, problems, solutions, and conclusion. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
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Start each body part with one clear main point. Then explain it and give one short example. Do not put many different ideas in the same long sentence.
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Use clear link words, such as “First”, “For example”, “As a result”, “However”, and “In addition”. Use them only when they show the true link between ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Finish the essay with a short conclusion that repeats the main problems and the main solutions. Your last sentence is not complete, so the essay needs a clear ending.
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You try to give both a problem and a solution, which is the right general plan for this question.
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You understand that education can affect work, poverty, crime, and daily life.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraph breaks and some link words, such as “On the one hand”, “However”, and “In addition”.
coherence and cohesion
You try to include a real-life example to support your point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • standardized testing
  • educational attainment
  • pedagogical methods
  • curriculum design
  • digital literacy
  • teacher training
  • student engagement
  • educational resources
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • parental involvement
  • education policy
  • learning outcomes
  • formative assessment
  • classroom environment
  • supportive learning
  • baseline skills
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