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At present we are producing more and more garbage . Why do you think this is happening ? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of garbage produced ?

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Introduction
In recent years , it has been obvious that the
amount
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 of
garbage
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 is increasing exponentially
regarding some
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for several
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 reasons .
This
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 essay will explain the reasons of excessive
amount
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 of rubbish and
then
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 provide pragmatic solutions to mitigate
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.
Body paragraph 1
One of the significant reasons of growing
amount
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 of rubbish is the single – use plastic items . After
the
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 single use , they become useless ,
such
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 as plastic cups
and
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, and
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people
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 should replace them
instead
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 of reusing them .
As a result
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 ,
due to
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 one-time-use plastics , there
are
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 more and more
garbage
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 . To reduce
this
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 issue ,
people
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 should try sustainable alternatives which can be used several times .
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 , it has been a habit
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 grocery products in plastic bags
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 it could be superior if they are reusable cloth bags .
Body paragraph 2
A severe problem is fast fashion
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 can be the main reason
of
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for
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 high levels of waste production .
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 , cheap clothes are easy to buy
as well as
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 easy to get rid of
them
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because of no value .
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 ,
people
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 are more prone to discard them
which
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 is considered
as
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an increasing volume of waste . To tackle
this
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 problem , companies ought to produce qualitative products rather than quantity . If
people
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 buy clothes related to its quality , they will tend to use them for a long period of time
which
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, which
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 can diminish the
amount
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 of
garbage
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 .
Conclusion
In conclusion , the
great
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amount
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 of
garbage
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increasing
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is increasing
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 owing to single-use items and fast fashion . I believe that reusable items and producing qualitative clothes can help to reduce rubbish .

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task response
Make the government part much clearer. The question asks what governments can do, but many of your ideas say what people or companies should do. Say that governments can ban some single-use plastic, make shops charge for plastic bags, and set rules for clothes makers.
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Explain each government action in more detail. For example, if shops charge for plastic bags, people may bring cloth bags from home. This gives a clear cause and result.
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Be careful with the fast-fashion idea. “Cheap clothes” do not always have “no value”. You can say that low prices make people buy more clothes and throw them away sooner.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one clear plan in each body part: cause, government action, and result. At times, the writing moves from people to companies, so the answer feels less direct.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences. For example: “Another cause of growing waste is fast fashion.” Then write about the cause before you move to the solution.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple, correct word groups. Write “the growing amount of rubbish”, “the reasons for the high amount of rubbish”, and “there is more and more garbage”.
coherence and cohesion
In the ending, restate the two causes and the government actions. This will make the final paragraph match the full question more closely.
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You answer both parts of the question. You give two clear causes: single-use plastic and fast fashion. You also give ways to cut waste.
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Your examples are on topic, such as plastic cups, cloth bags, and cheap clothes.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an ending. This makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “As a result”, “For example”, “Consequently”, and “In conclusion”.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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