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The bar chart below shows the proportion of waste recycled in four different European countries in 2005, 2010, and 2015.

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The given bar chart compares the percentage of waste recycled in four different EU nations in three years (2005, 2010, and 2015).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all figures showed an upward trajectory throughout the period, with the exception of France, which experienced a downward trend. It is
also
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 clear that Germany had the highest
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proportion
 in the initial year,
while
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 Spain witnessed the most dramatic growth over the given years. In detail, the share of the UK in terms of waste recycled accounted for 35% in 2005, compared with 50% for Germany.
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, both of these figures experienced an increase
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 the UK increased slightly to 40% by 2010, before reaching 55% by
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then
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 end of the period.
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, Germany rose steadily to 68% in the same year.
Following
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this
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 trend, the remaining countries, namely France and Spain, one out of two increased
throughot
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throughout
 the given years. The figure for France recorded 45% at the beginning of the data, but
then
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this
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 was followed by a
further
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 decline to 32%, making it the lowest fraction by 2015.
Conversely
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, Spain
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 demonstrated
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 significant rise had 22% in 2005,
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while there was
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 an increasing trajectory
by
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 26 percentage points, reaching its peak of 48% by the end of the timeframe.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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