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Is technology making people’s liveS easier? With opinion and examples.

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Introduction
Technology is one of the most crucial aspects in our
life
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 because it
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 our awareness about a variety of topics to meet our needs.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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live
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life
 comes easier than before because of the rapid development.
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, rapid access to a variety of websites to meet our needs
as
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 browsing
in
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on
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 the internet, studying,
improving
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and improving
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 our skills. To look more deeply, we can see our
changed
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changes
 have taken place through
last
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 century. It
obvious
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 that
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 scientists have developed new technologies
such
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 mobile phones, iPads , in construction, and in different topics.
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Furthermore
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, we can see
easier
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an easier
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 life through technology.
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, in
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last
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the last
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 century,
people
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people's
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 alarms were set
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 an unsophisticated
way
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or outdated way by someone
help
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to help
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 you
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wake you up
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by
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some
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 rock on your window or door. Compared to nowadays, everything has changed a lot because you can set
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an alarm
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 through your mobile.
Body paragraph 3
Moreover
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,the technologies have taken deeper
place
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root
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 in our society because
the
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of the
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 benefits and reduction in drawbacks.
For example
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, I can practice learning English through mobile and
IPad
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iPad
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 just through these technologies
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 it will be less effective than if I
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 it in
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last
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the last
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 century.
Body paragraph 4
Therefore
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, the authorities should introduce new regulations every decade to increase efficiency and accuracy.
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, that will
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 the disadvantages of new technology.
Conclusion
In conclusion, all these
efficiency
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efficiencies
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 and accuracy
making
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make
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 people's lives easier with specific precautions that
they
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should
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and
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regardless
age
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of age
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.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first part. For example: “I believe technology makes life easier because it saves time and helps people learn.” Keep this same view in all parts.
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Explain each main idea more fully. Do not only say that phones or the internet help. Say how they help, who they help, and why this makes life easier.
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Use one clear example in each body part. The alarm example is useful, but give more detail: people can set an alarm in seconds and wake up on time for work or school.
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The last body part about rules is not well linked to your main point. If you keep it, explain what rules are needed and how they make technology safer.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body parts, and an end. Make each body part focus on one idea only: daily tasks, learning, and then possible problems or rules.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a more natural way. “To begin with”, “Furthermore”, and “Moreover” are all used, but the ideas after them sometimes repeat. Use “For example”, “As a result”, and “However” only when they show a clear link.
coherence and cohesion
Make sentences easier to follow. For example, change “live comes easier than before because of the rapid development” to “Life is easier than before because technology has developed quickly.”
coherence and cohesion
Avoid unclear words such as “these technologies”, “everything”, and “different topics” when the reader may not know what you mean. Name the exact tool or area, such as online study, phone alarms, or building work.
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You answer the question with a clear positive view: technology can make life easier.
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You use useful real-life examples, such as online study, websites, mobile phones, and alarms.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion, so the reader can see the main direction of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
You try to organize ideas with linking words and separate parts for different points.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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