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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

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The line graph depicts information about the
fruit
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production
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 of four
various
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countries from 1970 to 2010. Spain, Turkey,
France
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, and Germany are the countries mentioned.
Overall
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, the country with the highest
fruit
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production
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 is Spain,
whereas
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 the region with the least
fruit
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production
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 went from
France
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 to Germany
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 by 2010.
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, the amount of
fruit
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 harvested in Turkey
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 increased steadily from 1970 to 2010.
To begin
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 with, the quantity of
fruit
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 manufactured in Spain went from around 5.5 to over 6
million
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tonnes
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 by 1980, and it continued to decrease to approximately 5
million
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tonnes
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 by 2010. The
fruit
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 cultivation in Turkey
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 shows a firm rise from 2 to 3.5
million
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tonnes
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, throughout the time period of 1970 to 2010. Even though the amount of
fruit
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 produced in
France
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, between 1970 and 1980, shows a slight rise, it is still around 1
million
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tonnes
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.
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, in
France
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, there are two clear rising points included in the line graph in 1999 and 2010, which are about 2 and 3
million
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tonnes
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, respectively. Unfortunately, for Germany, the
fruit
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 manufacturing amount faced a sharp decline from 2.5 to about 1.3
million
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tonnes
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, within mere two years.
As well as
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, it shows a slight and constant reduction in the
fruit
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production
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, reaching almost 1
million
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tonnes
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 by 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit, production, france, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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