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Band 4.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopement next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The plans
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the layout of Southwest Airport at present and next year after the redevelopment.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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,
One
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one
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 of the most important changes will be taken
placed
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place
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 in the gate
corridor
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, as it will be expanded next year and there will be ten more gates.
Although
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 the security, passport control and customs place will remain unchanged, there will be some new sections added to
this
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 airport.
Body paragraph 2
Now, there is only one entrance to
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 and departures
hall
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. In
departure
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the departure
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hall
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, which is on the
laft hand
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left-hand
 side of the terminal, there is a check-in desk on the left, and in front of
it
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it,
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 a café can be found. After passing the passport check and security, there is a straight
corridor
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 with eight gates that people can
transport in it by walkways there
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travel through on the walkways
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.
Conclusion
Next year, one more door will be added to each entrance, and
equipments
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equipment
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 will be found both in arrivals and departures. As can be seen, the position of the
ceck-in
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check-in
 desk and café will be changed, which
they
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apply
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will be moved to the right side and the bottom, respectively.
Also
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, a new section for baggage drop off will be
palced
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placed
 on the left side of the
hall
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,
the
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in the
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 same place
of
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as
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 the previous check-in desk position. A new café, an ATM and a car hire office will be opened
on
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in
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 the arrival
hall
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.
Furthermore
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, there will be some shops in the area between the security and gate
corridor
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, which will be followed to reach the Y-shaped gate
corridor
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 containing eighteen gates equipped
by
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with
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 a sky train.

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task response
Give a clearer overview of the biggest changes. State that the gate area will become much larger, a train will be added, and more services will be available in both halls.
task response
Check all details from the plans. Say clearly that the number of gates will rise from eight to eighteen. Avoid unclear ideas such as “equipment will be found”, because this does not tell the reader what will be added.
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Compare the two plans in a more even way. Include what will stay the same, such as security, passport control, and customs, as well as what will move or be new.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, overview, present layout, and future layout. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area. For example, describe the departure hall together, then the arrival hall, then the gate area. At times, the report moves between areas too quickly.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words such as “At present”, “In contrast”, “Next year”, “In addition”, and “Finally”. Use “therefore” only when one change causes another change.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence clear and direct. For example, write “Passengers will walk along the corridor” instead of “people can transport in it by walkways there”.
task response
You identify several key changes, including more gates, a new baggage drop area, shops, an ATM, a car hire office, and a sky train.
task response
You also note important parts that will not change, such as security, passport control, and customs.
coherence and cohesion
Your report has a useful introduction and an overview, and it separates the present plan from the future plan.
coherence and cohesion
You use location words such as “left side”, “right side”, “in front of”, and “between”, which help the reader picture the plan.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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