The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
two maps illustrates before and after look of a college
cafe
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, which was redesigned for a better look.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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,
There has
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there have
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been
a
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apply
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significant changes in the
cafe
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which
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, which
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are
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include
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outdoor seating areas, salad bar and many more, but some
has
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have
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not been changed
which
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, which
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is kitchen and toilet.
Body paragraph 2
In
north-west
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the north-west
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section of the
cafe
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kitchen has been untouched
and
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, and
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serving
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the serving
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areas
is
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are
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now
been
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for hot meals. Going down, a salad bar has been set up for the people.A barbecue and new seating
area
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has
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also
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been installed outside the
cafe
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, in the south.
Conclusion
In the middle of the restaurant,
Staff
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the staff
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dining rooms have been converted into a coffee bar
area
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and a
take away
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takeaway
food
area
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.
However
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,
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area
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the area
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for Tables and chairs has not been changed or
has not been
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replaced. A recycling
bins
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bin
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has been replaced with
regular
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a regular
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bin
and
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, and
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beside that toilets
was
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were
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left untouched.
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task response
Give a clearer overview of the main changes. Say that the cafe now has more food and drink places and more seats, while the kitchen, toilets, and table area stay the same.
task response
Check every part of the maps and report only what you can see. For example, explain the change from the staff dining room to the coffee bar and take-away area, and the change from bins to recycling bins.
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Use exact place words, such as north-west, centre, south, next to, and outside. This will help the reader picture the new plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, overview, first map area, then second map area. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by place. For example, write about the north and centre first, then write about the south and outside area.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words such as 'while', 'in contrast', 'also', and 'next to'. Avoid very long sentences with many ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make the time change clear in each sentence. Use 'was changed into', 'was added', 'was removed', and 'remained unchanged'.
task response
You identify several key changes, including the salad bar, coffee bar, take-away food area, barbecue, and new seats outside.
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You also notice important parts that did not change, such as the kitchen and toilets.
coherence and cohesion
Your report has an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, so the reader can see your main plan.
coherence and cohesion
You use place words such as 'north-west', 'middle', and 'south', which is useful for map reports.
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