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Band 3

The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The map illustrates changes in the college
cafe
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 before and after it was
reorganized
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reorganised
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.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, the
cafe
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 experienced a significant
reorganization
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reorganisation
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,
while
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 a new and large
area
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 outside
from
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apply
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the
cafe
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 was planned to serve as outdoor seating and the barbecue
area
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, and adding
take away
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take-away
 food service, salad bar to the
cafe
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.
Body paragraph 2
To elaborate, the most significant change is the expansion of the
cafe
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, there are 5 tables and a barbecue
area
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 established at outdoor,
whereas
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 there was nothing before
redesigning
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the redesign
. A salad bar was
also
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 added on the left of the
cafe
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, and the recycling bins on the right were enlarged.
Conclusion
Apart from that, before the
cafe
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 was redesigned, there was a kitchen and a serving
area
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 for all food and drinks at the upper-left of the
cafe
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.
In addition
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, there were tables and chairs in the hall of the
cafe
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while
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 two staff dining rooms were in the upper-middle of the hall. Kitchen remained at the same place,
while
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serving
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the serving
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area
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 was
reorganized
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reorganised
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 and
seperated
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separated
. Hot meals were served at the original place, and
take away
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takeaway
 food and coffee bar were relocated to the left and the right staff dining rooms, respectively.

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task response
Give a clearer overall view of the main changes. Say that the café was made larger and that the old serving area was split into new food and drink parts.
task response
Check all labels and places carefully. Some details are not fully clear, such as what happened to the old tables and chairs and the two staff dining rooms. Include these only if they are shown on the plan.
task response
Use more exact map language. For example, write “to the left of the café” or “in the upper middle part” instead of “at outdoor” or “outside from the cafe.”
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: an opening, an overall view, and detail paragraphs. Keep this plan in future map reports.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence complete and avoid very long sentences joined by commas. For example, change “The kitchen remained at the same place, while serving area was reorganized and seperated” to “The kitchen stayed in the same place. However, the serving area was changed and divided.”
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. “Apart from that” is less useful here. Start the next paragraph with “Inside the café” to show the reader that you are moving to a new area.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same names throughout. Write “take-away food”, “salad bar”, and “coffee bar” in the same way each time. Also check spelling, such as “separated” and “redesign.”
task response
You report several key changes, including the outdoor seating and barbecue area, the salad bar, larger recycling bins, and the new food and drink services.
task response
You make useful before-and-after comparisons, especially by noting that the kitchen stayed in the same place while the serving area changed.
coherence and cohesion
The opening tells the reader what the plans show, and the overall paragraph identifies the main changes before you give details.
coherence and cohesion
The details are grouped in a sensible way: first the outside and side areas, then the parts inside the café.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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