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Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter explain why you have moved describe the new house invite your friend to come and visit

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Dear Tom, How have you been
dear
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? I hope
,
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 everything is fine. You know that I lived in a small
house
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 that wasn't
convenience from
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convenient to
 a lot of facilities
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such
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, such
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 as
wider
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a wider
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 road, far away from neighbors and the main city.
Due to
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 these reasons, I had to sell that
house
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 at
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 price and
leaving
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leave
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 that place. Nowadays I have been moving to a new
house
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for
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every
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 2 weeks
everyday
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. Every day I do my work easily because the new
house
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 is built a lot of facilities that makes me to help and to complete the tasks on time
as well as
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 reach the office on time. I'm sure about it. If you come and visit there, it will make you overjoyed because
this
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 new
house
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 is totally modern style
and
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, and
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around
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my
neighbors
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neighbours
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 are generous and supportive. I'm going to prepare a small party on 31st December. I want to be grateful if you come and visit
to
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my new
house
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task response
Say more clearly why you moved. For example, say that the old house was far from work and had few shops or roads near it.
task response
Describe the new house with more clear details, such as the rooms, garden, kitchen, or its place near your office.
task response
Your invite is good. Add the time, date, and a clear ask, such as: “Please come to my house on 31 December for a small party.”
coherence and cohesion
Use short paragraphs: one for why you moved, one for the new house, and one for the visit and party.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like “because”, “so”, “also”, and “finally” to join your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Add a closing at the end, such as “Best wishes,” and your name.
task response
You talk about why you moved, your new house, and an invite for your friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a friendly start and the main ideas are in a clear order.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relocate
  • move
  • settle in
  • residence
  • accommodation
  • spacious
  • cozy
  • modern
  • amenities
  • features
  • guest room
  • look forward to
  • excited to
  • catch up
  • explore
  • unpack
  • neighborhood
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