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Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter explain why you have moved describe the new house invite your friend to come and visit

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Dear Tom, How have you been
dear
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? I hope everything is fine. You know that I used to live
a
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in a
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small
house
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 that wasn't
convenience
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convenient
 with a lot of facilities
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such
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, such
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 as
wide
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a wide
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 road, far away from neighbors and the main city.
Due to
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 these reasons, I had to sell that
house
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 at
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 price and
left
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leave
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 that place. Nowadays I have been moving to a new
house
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for
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every
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 2 weeks
everyday
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apply
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. Every day I do my work easily because the
house
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is built
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has
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 a lot of facilities that
makes me to help and
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help me
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 complete the tasks on time
as well as
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 reach
to
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the
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 office on time. I'm sure about it, if you come and visit there, it will make you overjoyed because
this
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house
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 is totally
depend
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dependent
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around
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apply
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my
neighbors
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neighbours
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 are generous and supportive. I'm going to prepare a small party on 31st December. I would
to
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apply
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be grateful if you come and visit
to
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my new
house
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. Best wisher Nikita

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task response
Say more clearly why you moved. For example, explain that the old house was far from work and had few useful things near it. Add a little more about the new house, such as its rooms or garden.
task response
Make the invite more warm. Say when your friend can come, how long they can stay, and what you can do together.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a clear order: reason for moving, new house, then the invite. Use short links such as “because”, “so”, “also”, and “therefore”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The second paragraph has ideas about moving, work, the house, and neighbors. Split these into two short paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more natural ending, such as “Best wishes,” followed by your name.
task response
You wrote about all the main parts: why you moved, the new home, and an invite to visit.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a friendly start and is divided into paragraphs, so it is easy to follow.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relocate
  • move
  • settle in
  • residence
  • accommodation
  • spacious
  • cozy
  • modern
  • amenities
  • features
  • guest room
  • look forward to
  • excited to
  • catch up
  • explore
  • unpack
  • neighborhood
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