You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter -describe the problem -say how long it has been a problem -explain what action you want the neighbour to take

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Dear Mr Thommes, I hope you're doing
good
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well
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. I'm writing to discuss an issue regarding loud music at
night
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, which
distrups
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disturbs
my sleep.
Firstly
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, after 9 PM, I have noticed loud music from your house
which
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, which
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bothers me a lot,
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due to that
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so
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I'm not getting peaceful sleep. I
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also
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was also
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diagnosed with insomnia, and my doctor prescribe few medicines which I have to take
inorder
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in order
to get
sleep
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to sleep
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early.
However
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, because of
this
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loud music, I'm not getting
sufficient
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a sufficient
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amount of sleep at
night
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. In the mornings,
due to
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lack of sleep, my head feels heavy and
not
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I am not
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able to concentrate
in
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on
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my work.
This
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problem
is
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has been
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going on
since
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for
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one week
,
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.
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I have asked your children to keep it low at
night
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. Unfortunately, there is no change to it. I would suggest
to take an
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taking
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immediate action as soon as possible. I would
also
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appreciate
if
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it if
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your children
can
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could
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understand my situation and keep the volume low or put on headphones so I can have peaceful sleep at
night
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. I hope you can understand my health issues and take spontaneous action to lower the volume after 9 PM. Yours faithfully, Taylor

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task response
You cover all parts of the task: the problem, how long it has gone on, and what you want your neighbour to do. Make the time clearer: say “for the past week” rather than “since one week.”
task response
Keep the request polite but clear. For example: “Could you please keep the music low after 9 p.m.?” Avoid “take spontaneous action”; “take action soon” is more natural.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, main part, and ending. Use shorter sentences in the main paragraph so the key points are easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “because,” “so,” “however,” and “therefore.” For example, “Because I do not sleep well, I find it hard to focus at work.”
coherence and cohesion
Put the health problem and the effect on your work in one short paragraph, then put your request in a new paragraph. This will make the letter easier to follow.
task response
You clearly explain that loud music after 9 p.m. is stopping you from sleeping, and you give a clear action: lower the volume or use headphones.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable for a letter to a neighbour, and the order of ideas is easy to understand.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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