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The floor plans show a typical American and a Japanese office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The picture illustrates the difference between a Japanese and an American typical
office
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Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, it can be seen that the area
largely
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is largely
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 unchanged, with only a few minor developments taking place.
Body paragraph 2
In the Japanese
office
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 were
two
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manager
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 sections, in the middle part of
area
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the area
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 located major department
manager
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 section. The
office
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 previously occupied
by
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had
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 four windows. There are
two
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 large groups of desks where employees sit facing each other.
Conclusion
Moving to the second area, the
office
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 was built with many departments. The left side was
copier
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a copier
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, storage and
two
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 conference rooms.The ten chairs
located
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are located
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 not far from each other.
In addition
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 in right side,
also
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two
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manager
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 sections with
main
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the main
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 department
manager
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.
Generally
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Generally,
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 windows are positioned along both sides of the
office
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Task response
Give a clear overview of the main differences. For example, say that the American office has more separate rooms, while the Japanese office has large shared desk areas.
Task response
Describe both plans fully and do not use words such as “previously” unless the plans show a time change. These are two different offices, not one office before and after changes.
Task response
Check the map labels carefully. Some details are unclear or missing, such as where the main manager areas, meeting rooms, storage, and copier are in each plan.
Coherence and cohesion
Use a simple order: introduction, overview, Japanese office, then American office. This will help the reader follow your report.
Coherence and cohesion
Write full sentences with clear subjects and verbs. For example: “The main department manager is in the middle of the Japanese office.”
Coherence and cohesion
Use linking words correctly: “In contrast”, “while”, “also”, and “on the other hand”. Leave a space after full stops and commas.
Language control
Avoid unclear phrases such as “the area largely unchanged” and “the ten chairs located”. Use clear forms: “The area is largely unchanged” and “Ten chairs are placed close together.”
Task response
You identify key parts of the plans, including desks, managers, windows, conference rooms, storage, and a copier.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, an overview, and separate parts for the two offices.
Comparison
You try to compare the office layouts and point out where facilities are placed.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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