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Some people say it is better to work with big companies rather than small ones. Do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
It is widely argued that choosing a
career
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 path in large corporations
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plays
 a significant role in modern society,
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 strongly believe that working in big companies offers a far greater
career
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 stability and growth opportunities.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 primary argument supporting
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 position is that working with large organizations has many benefits,
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 as having many
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 to
work
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 in that will help many
people
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 to reach
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 time. Second of all,
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large
 corporations most often have many employees
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this
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leads to having a lighter
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 day rather than a hard one
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 the reason for
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 the
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 splits to many
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Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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 crucial aspect that must be considered is that many
people
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 believe that choosing a
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 path should mostly depend on what the person
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 or
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 job is,
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 it is known that
people
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work
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 better when they
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 a job they love.
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 but not least,
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people
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 prefer having their own small business rather than working in a big one since
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 more comfortable being around a small group who all know
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each other
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Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 examining both sides of the argument,
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it
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 is clear that choosing a
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 to
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 in and spend
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the majority
 of your time there should depend on what you prefer and what your heart
desiers
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desires
.

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task response
Make your main view clear and keep it the same from start to end. At first, you say big companies are better, but at the end you say the best job depends on what a person likes. Choose one clear side, or say you partly agree.
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Give more detail for each main point. For example, explain how a big company can give job safety, more training, or more chances to move to a new job.
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Use real or clear examples. You could say that a large bank may train new workers and offer work in many parts of the business, while a small shop may have fewer such chances.
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The point about work being split among many people needs care. More workers do not always mean an easier day. Explain when this may happen and why.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. However, the second body part mostly gives the other side, so it does not fully support your main view. Make each body part help your answer.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words in a natural way: “First,” “Also,” “However,” and “In conclusion.” Avoid long link phrases such as “Last but not least” when a short word is enough.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Start with the main idea, explain it, then give an example. This will make the reader follow your points more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence starts and full stops. Do not start common words with capital letters in the middle of a sentence, such as “And,” “The,” or “Because.”
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You answer both views and give a clear opinion near the start.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a good basic shape: an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You try to use linking words to show how your ideas are connected.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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