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Some people argue that thanks to the widespread accessibility of the internet, libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is often claimed that the prevalence of the internet has reduced the need for
libraries
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. I disagree with
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 statement because numerous
people
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 still prefer reading physical
materials
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, and these institutions provide
access
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 to publications through legitimate and authorised sources.
Body paragraph 1
There are many individuals who would rather read and obtain printed books than read from a screen. With
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 method, they can focus solely on reading
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 of getting distracted by notifications or pop-up ads.
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, many
people
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, especially those who use electronic devices for work, consider reading a tangible book to be a break from looking at screens.
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, in South Korea, some public
libraries
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 have introduced phone-free reading spaces where visitors are encouraged to put away their electronic devices and read printed works without digital distractions.
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,
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 facilities remain valuable for individuals who wish to maintain their reading habits.
Body paragraph 2
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 reading or searching for specific data on the internet can be more convenient than going to a library, the latter ensures that the information and reading
materials
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 are obtained from legitimate sources.
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 is especially important when the knowledge being sought is contained in an ancient or rare book, as it may be difficult to determine whether information found online is accurate or reliable.
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, some may choose not to pay for online publications when unauthorised or stolen versions are available on the internet, allowing them to
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 these works without purchasing them.
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this
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 violates copyright laws,
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,
libraries
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 allow
people
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 to
access
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 legitimate copies of
such
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materials
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 for free.
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, since 2024, to encourage citizens to read more and use legitimate sources for free, the Saudi Ministry of Culture has established public reading facilities in many neighbourhoods in Riyadh.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I strongly believe in the importance of
libraries
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, which allow
people
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 to
access
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 physical reading
materials
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 in a legitimate and authorised way.

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task response
Your view is clear from the start, and you keep it through the whole essay. To make it even stronger, explain more fully why online sources cannot do the same job as a library. For example, say that library staff can help people find good books and check facts.
task response
Your two main points are on topic: people may like paper books, and libraries give legal access to books. The second point could be clearer if you focus more on trust and legal access, rather than spending many lines on people who use stolen online copies.
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Your examples fit your ideas, but make sure they are true and easy to check. If you are not sure about a date, place, or group, use a more general example instead.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear four-part shape: opening, two body parts, and ending. Each body part has one main idea. Keep this strong shape in future essays.
coherence and cohesion
Your linking words, such as “Moreover”, “Although”, “Furthermore”, and “For instance”, help the reader follow your ideas. In the second body part, however, the move from old books to stolen online copies is a little sudden. Add a short link sentence to show how both points are about safe and legal access.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are long and hold several ideas. Split them into two shorter sentences when you explain an important point. This will make your meaning easier to follow.
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You answer the question directly and give a clear view: libraries are still needed.
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You give real reasons, not only general claims. The points about less screen time and legal copies are useful and on topic.
coherence and cohesion
The opening tells the reader what you will argue, and the ending returns clearly to the same view.
coherence and cohesion
The first body part moves well from the main idea, to reasons, to an example, and then to a short result.
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