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The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The plan illustrates a café before the redesign , but it
also
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 represents the coffee shop after the modifications , showing how it looks now.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, at first sight,
it is clear that
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 there is a large variety of modifications comparing the plans of the café today and before the redesign. Showing a huge amount of stuff and services added, representing an improvement for the interior of the building.
Body paragraph 2
It is obvious that the designer has made many different changes. Establishing the option “take-away food”
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 a “coffee bar”
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 of staff dining rooms.
In addition
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, they added a “salad bar”,and they changed the “serving areas” into “hot meals” only.
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, they made important changes , adding “outdoor seating”
Conclusion
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, new spaces have been established to have a completely different vision of their business. With the intention of making a new “sustainable” and environmentally conscious view of the café to attract new clients.

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task response
Give a clear overview of the main changes. Say that the old staff dining room was changed into a coffee bar and take-away food area, and that new areas were added, such as the salad bar and outdoor seating.
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Report all key parts of both plans. The answer does not describe the old plan in enough detail, and it does not clearly say where the new parts are.
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Do not add ideas that are not shown in the plans. The plans do not show a new green aim, so remove the point about being sustainable or bringing in new clients.
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Use direct comparisons between the past and now. For example, explain what was removed, what was changed, and what was added.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part order: introduce the plans, give an overview, describe one side of the café, then describe the other side.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main paragraph about a clear group of changes. This will stop the ideas from feeling like a list.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words such as 'In the past', 'Now', 'In addition', and 'By contrast'. Avoid starting many sentences with the same words.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are not complete or clear, such as 'Showing a huge amount of stuff and services added'. Write full sentences with a clear subject and verb.
task response
You identify several important new features, including take-away food, a coffee bar, a salad bar, hot meals, and outdoor seating.
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You try to give an overall view that the café has changed a lot.
coherence and cohesion
The answer has an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as 'In addition', 'Finally', and 'Moreover', to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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