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The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

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Introduction
The plan
depict
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 how a college
cantin
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cafeteria
 was in the past and how it was redesigned now.
Overall
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, the café still
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 the old design with the same rooms.
However
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, a new outdoor place was introduced to accommodate more students.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, the cantin open a new place with a barbecue and outdoor seating
including
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 five tables
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whereas
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 the
others
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other
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 seats are indoors.
As a result
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, they create two new
door
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doors
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 to connect the rooms.
At
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 the
opposit
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other hand
, the indoor kitchen
still
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is still
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 the same
appart
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apart
 from the fact that the serving area was changed
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 hot meals.
Conclusion
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,
lot
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 of things have changed in the
principle
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 area. Recycling bins have been introduced
taking
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much
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 more space than the previous bins. Nearby the bins are the
toilet
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toilets
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. On the other side of the room,
designer
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the designer
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 created a Salad bar.
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,
staff
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the staff
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 dining room
have
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 been changed
for
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to
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 a coffee bar and a
take away
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takeaway
 food.

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task response
Give a more complete account of both plans. Some main changes are missed or are not clear, such as the exact new use of each old area and the full change to the serving space.
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Check each detail against the plans before you write. For example, make clear what was there before, what is there now, and where it is.
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Use clear compare words: “was changed into”, “was added”, “was removed”, and “remained in the same place”. This will make the changes easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, an overview, and two main parts. However, the order inside each part can be clearer. Describe the plan in one set order, for example from left to right or from top to bottom.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. “Firstly” and “Secondly” are useful, but add simple links such as “In addition”, “Meanwhile”, “Next to this”, and “On the other side” only when they show a clear link.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid unclear words such as “the others seats”, “the principle area”, and “the rooms”. Name the exact place each time, such as “the main dining area” or “the outdoor seating area”.
coherence and cohesion
Write full, clear sentences. For example, change “designer created a Salad bar” to “A salad bar was added on the other side of the room.”
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You identify the main overall change: an outdoor area was added to give students more places to sit.
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You include several key new parts, such as the barbecue, outdoor tables, recycling bins, salad bar, coffee bar, and take-away food area.
coherence and cohesion
The overview gives the reader a clear main idea about what stayed the same and what changed.
coherence and cohesion
You split the details into two body parts, which helps the reader follow your description.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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