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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 graph and table illustrate the Foreign
students
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 in English-speaking countries over the period 2004 to 2012.
This
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 report aims to
summaries
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summarise
 the key trends,significant comparisons and notable changes highlighted in the data.
Overall
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,it is evident that
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USA
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the USA
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 experienced a marked increase,the largest proportion is observed in
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USA
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the USA
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,
while
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 Canada represents the smallest.Another notable trend is the UK and Australlia which almost have identical numbers over the period.
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Initially
,
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USA
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the USA
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 accounted for approximatly 175.000
students
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,making
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 highest among all
counteries
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countries
.
This
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followed
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is followed
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 by
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the UK
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 ,which
representes
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represents
 approximately 110,000
students
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.significantly lower than the largest
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country
.
In contrast
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,
Canada
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Canada's
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 contribution is relatively insignificant,with a percentage
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of
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 only 5%.
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,a noticeable trend is the similarity between the UK and Australia,which both show patterns over the period. In summary,the data highlights the increase in foreign
students
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 ,with the
USA
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 having the highest number and
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Australia
 having the highest persentage standing out as the most significant feature.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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