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Some people think that university students should not be given exams, and instead should receive a score based on their performance throughout the academic term. Others believe that exams are necessary for learning and discipline, and should always be taken by students at the end of a semester. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
There are various
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ways a university
student
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accessed
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 throughout the course of a school year. Most
curriculums
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curricula
 have the
students
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 take a final
exam
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at the end
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 of a
semester
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 that tests the
students
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' core understanding of a given topic
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 it usually takes up 30% of their final
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. The remaining 70% is commonly dictated by the
students
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'
performance
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 throughout the
semester
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homework
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, assignments, projects, and
attendance
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 being the measurable criteria. People are split on whether a single final
exam
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 that takes up almost one-third of the final
grade
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 is truly
neccessary
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necessary
 and that
overall
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performance
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 over the course of the
semester
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 should be more valued. I believe both opinions on the matter come with their own flaws, but with improvement , they work well together to
access
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 a
student
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's
performance
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.
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Accessing a
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 based on
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performance
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 seems like it wouldn't have many drawbacks.
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,in reality, there are many factors that play against the
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students favor
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students' favour
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 in
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 type of curriculum. A family emergency or just getting a cold for a week could negatively impact a
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students
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 final
grade
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 when you consider
attendance
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,
homework
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, and other
accessments
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assessments
 based on a schedule.
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On the other hand
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, a final
exam
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 gives the
student
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 the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to prove their
performance
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 through hard work and discipline. Even if they had missed a week
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 an emergency of some kind, they can study the material themselves and prove it on the final
exam
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, it is obvious that grading a
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students
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student's
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 learning from an entire
semester
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 on one single
exam
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 is not the solution. It is impossible to
grade
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 the extensive amount of material a
student
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 studied on a couple
sheets
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 of paper.
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, creating the need for the
before-mentioned accessments
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aforementioned assessments
 based on
homework
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,
attendance
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, and assignments. They are tools that can show a
student
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's understanding of a subject outside of the final
exam
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Conclusion
In conclusion, a
student
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 must be
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 based on their
overall
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performance
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 throughout the
semester
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 and on a final
exam
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 that solidifies that
performance
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.
Attendance
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,
homework
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, assignments, and exams all work together to create a clear picture of a
student
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's
performance
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 they improve on each
others
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other's
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 setbacks.

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task response
Discuss both sides more fully. The first side needs a clear good point, such as work during the term showing steady effort and more than one skill. The exam side also needs one more clear reason, such as fair testing for all students.
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Make your own view clearer in the first paragraph. Say that both term work and a final test should count, then explain why this mix is best.
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Use more real, clear examples. For example, explain how a project can show research and team work, while an exam can show what one student knows alone.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, middle, and end. To make the flow better, use links such as “First”, “For example”, “However”, and “As a result” at the start of key ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main idea. The paragraph about the weak points of term work is clear, but it should first state the main point, then give the illness or family problem example.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas are repeated near the end. Join them in a more direct way: term work shows progress over time, and the final test checks full knowledge at the end.
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You answer both views and give a clear view that both term work and final tests should be used.
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The example of illness or a family problem is useful because it shows why only term work may not be fair.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs follow a clear order: introduction, one view, the other view, your view, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion clearly brings your main idea back and gives a full answer to the question.
Fully explain your ideas

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