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After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. In your letter: Introduce yourself and let him/her know why you are writing Express your appreciation And offer him/ her to visit your home with his/her family. You do NOT need to write any address.

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Dear Mr Thommes, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I'
m
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 writing to thank you for looking after me when I met
an
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 accident.
Although
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 I don't know you personally, I'
m
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 really glad that you took care of me when I was in
hospital
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the hospital
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.
Firstly
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, my name is Taylor, and I'
m
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 24 years old. I was returning from my college
and
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 suddenly
one
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a
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 car just hit my scooter
which
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, which
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 caused me
fall
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to fall
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 on
road
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the road
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. After
that
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that,
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 I don't remember what happened to me. When I got discharged from
hospital
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the hospital
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, I asked one of the nurses
that
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apply
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who took me to
this
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hosiptal
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hospital
. She mentioned to me that you brought me to
this
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hosital
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hospital
 and
was
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have been
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 looking after since three days. I'
m
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 really grateful for all
your
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the
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 kindness and generosity you have shown in my difficult time. I would like to invite you to my home and have dinner together. I would appreciate it if you
can
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could
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 accept my invite and spend some time with
you
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me
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. Please let me know if you can come
,
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.
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 I can send my address to you. Yours faithfully, Taylor

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task response
Give a little more clear detail about how the person helped you. For example, say that he stayed at the hospital or spoke to the nurse. This will make your thanks feel more real.
task response
Make the home visit offer more complete. You can say when you would like the family to come and ask what day is good for them.
coherence and cohesion
Put the event in a clear time order: the accident, the hospital, what you found out, and your thanks. Use simple links such as “After that”, “When”, and “Because of this”.
coherence and cohesion
Some lines are hard to read because words are missing. For example, write “which caused me to fall on the road” and “you had looked after me for three days”.
task response
You cover all main parts: you say who you are, thank the man, and ask him and his family to visit your home.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main part, and ending. The greeting and closing are polite and fit a thank-you letter.
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