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In the future, nobody will by printed newspapers or blooks because tehy will be able to read everything tehy want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or diagree with this statement ?

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Introduction
People in the coming generations will not get information and news from paper sources like newspapers or
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 , and they will prefer learning everything online or through AI. In
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Body paragraph 1
As we all know , we live in a fast-paced world, individuals love instant gratification , and the feeling of having everything just one click away. In the internet and AI era, every headline and piece of information is accessible online for us. Automatically , young adults like reading
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 online , and save money rather than buying from a
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 shop , or lending it from a library.
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 was a kid , I used to read a lot of story
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 still admire reading
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.
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, now
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 read them online.
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 it costs me nothing , I definitely miss that feeling of reading a
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. One can get really attached to the paper
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.
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 ,
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 are so precious that they can't be completely replaced by e-
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. The Internet has existed for more than two decades now , yet there are still folks who visit libraries . Libraries exist in schools , colleges and universities .
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 , if all of us prefer
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 online ,
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 it will
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 impact
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 publishers and authors as pirated versions get easily available online, free of cost.
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 , I do agree with the statement to some extent , and newspapers are replaced , as every news is now available within minutes on the internet and social media , but
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 will not be replaced.
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 , we all should build the habit of reading
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 , especially in kids , so they at least get the feeling of reading a
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Conclusion
To summarise, I would like to say
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 paper
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 are an asset , and we all should collectively make an effort to preserve them. It is obvious that in the future , people will choose
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 online , but it doesn' t mean that we
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should stop
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 printing
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 and newspapers. Those who value
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 will buy
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 regardless of any era.

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Task response
State your view more clearly in the first part. You partly agree: news on paper may disappear, but paper books will stay. Say this in one direct sentence.
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Answer all parts of the idea. The question says people will read online without paying. Explain that free online books are not always legal, full, or easy to find.
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Give more support for your main point about books. For example, paper books do not need power or internet, are easier on the eyes for some people, and can be kept for many years.
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Your personal story is useful, but make its link to the main idea clearer. Explain why missing the feel of a paper book shows that some readers may still buy books.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an ending. Make the first main part focus only on why online reading will grow, and the second part focus only on why paper books may remain.
Coherence and cohesion
Use fewer linking words such as “Automatically”, “Furthermore”, and “Additionally” when they do not add a clear link. Use simple links: “First”, “However”, “For example”, and “As a result”.
Coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same point that books are special or people like paper books. Add a new reason instead, then explain it.
Coherence and cohesion
Keep the word choice the same throughout. The essay moves between “books”, “paper books”, “e-books”, and “books online”. Choose clear names and use them in the same way.
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You give a clear balanced view: online news is likely to replace paper news more than online reading will replace paper books.
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You use a personal example about reading story books. This makes your idea easy to understand.
Coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because it has an introduction, a paragraph for each side, and a conclusion.
Coherence and cohesion
The word “However” clearly shows the change from the first view to your opposing view.
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