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In the future all cars, bussess and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicle out weigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
More and more people think that getting an auto drived vehicles is considered to be more advantageous than
self driving
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self-driving
.In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
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 statement
and
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i
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I
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 believe that
driverless
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vechicle
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vehicle
 is much more important for two reasons.
Body paragraph 1
First of all,
i
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I
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 believe that having a
driverless
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 vehicle makes people
more feel
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feel more
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 comfortable and safer. In fact,
driverless
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 cars can decrease the
amount
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number
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 of car accidents. A study published by
new york university
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New York University
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 in 2024 concluded that 90%of people who
get a auto
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drive cars
they
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apply
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have less chance of getting killed by car accidents.
Conclusion
In addition
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, I believe that getting a
driverless
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cars
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car
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 is essential in the future because after many
years
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years,
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 the human have more things to do
instead
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 of
drive
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driving
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. What
i
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 mean the
percenting
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percentage
 of crowning will
decreased
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decrease
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task response
Give a clear answer in the first part: say that the good points are greater than the bad points. Then add at least one bad point, such as job loss for drivers or problems when the system fails. This will answer the full question.
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Explain each main idea more fully. For example, say how driverless cars may stop crashes: they do not get tired, drink alcohol, or look at phones. Your second idea about people having more time needs a full example.
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Add a short ending that repeats your view and sums up the two main reasons. This will make your answer feel complete.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start and two main parts, which is good. Use simple link words to show the order of ideas: “First”, “Also”, “However”, and “In the end”.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one idea. Start with the main point, explain it, and then give an example. Do not leave ideas unfinished, such as the last sentence about traffic.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same key words in a clear way. For example, choose “driverless vehicles” or “self-driving cars” and use it through the essay. Avoid changing between “auto drive cars”, “driverless cars”, and “self driving” too often.
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You give a clear personal view and choose two useful good points: safety and more free time for people.
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The example about fewer car crashes is linked to your first main idea.
coherence and cohesion
The words “First of all” and “In addition” help the reader see your two main points.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are put in a simple order: opinion first, then reasons.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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