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Water shortage is a dangerous problem in the world. Discuss the consequences and solutions for this problem? And do the social media or newspapers spread the awareness among people? And examples which are relevant.

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Introduction
In today's society
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water
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 shortage has become a ergent issue towards our lives.All over the world carries a
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negative
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resources
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due to
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 the phenomenon. I'd like to
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discuss
 the problem from both consequences and solutions,
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 the opinion that social media liteally spread the awareness
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among
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Body paragraph 1
Several causes are at play when it comes to the
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 shortage.First and foremost,natural
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 are not
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 covered,so some areas could be brought
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alarm
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non sufficient
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insufficient
 income,the financial burden is a main reason
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 the problem.
Last
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 but not least,the public can't receive the awareness that
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 all the lives' responsibility to save both the
water
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resources
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 and the planet.To break he delima,some
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actions
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.Primarily,realise the natural differences between the countries and
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their status
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Further more
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Furthermore
,the government should take
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 via lectures and
presentation
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presentations
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 to
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help
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 the audiences to understand how to protect our planet's
resources
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More over
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Moreover
,the public should enhance their awareness through using social media and study the proper way to save
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Conclusion
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Answer every part of the question. Write about the results of water shortage, ways to solve it, and whether social media and newspapers can help people learn more.
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Your second body part talks about causes, but the question asks for consequences. Add clear results, such as less food, poor health, and people leaving dry areas.
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Give real and clear examples. For example, say that schools can teach children to turn off taps, or that news posts can show how dry land hurts farmers.
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Make your view on social media and newspapers clear. Say how they can share facts, ads, and simple tips, but also say that the government must take action.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, consequences, solutions and media, then conclusion.
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Finish the essay with a short conclusion. Restate the main results and the best ways to save water.
coherence and cohesion
Start each paragraph with one main idea. Then add two or three sentences that explain it and give an example.
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Use simple linking words correctly, such as “First”, “Also”, “For example”, “However”, and “In conclusion”.
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Some ideas are hard to follow because the words are not clear. Use short sentences and check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.
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You understand that water shortage is a world problem and that people, government, and media all have a role.
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You give several possible solutions, including teaching people and using social media.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction tells the reader what the essay will discuss.
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You try to order ideas with phrases such as “First and foremost” and “Last but not least”.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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