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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000

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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000
The line diagram illustrates how much three kinds of fuel were produced in the United Kingdom from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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,
petroleum
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 and natural gas
production
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 increased over the period of time,
whereascoal
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whereas coal
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production
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 decreased over time. In 1981, the amount of
petroleum
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 produced was approximately 90
energy
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units
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. The
production
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 of
petroleum
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 is
then
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 sharply increased to nearly 140
energy
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units
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; after that, it levelled off from 1984 to 1987.
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, it sharply declined again to 100
energy
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units
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 and rose again just above 140
energy
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units
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 in the year 2000.
On the other hand
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, the
production
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 of coal was at 80
energy
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units
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 in 1981.
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, that coal
production
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 level sharply declined to below 40
energy
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units
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, and rose again to 60
energy
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units
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.
Then
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, that coal
production
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 decreased over the period of time and reached just below 40
energy
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units
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 in 2000. The
petroleum
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 manufacturing was just below 40
energy
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units
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, which dramatically increased from 42
energy
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units
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 to 100
energy
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units
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 in the year between 1990 and 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, production, energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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