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Band 4

Students should be allowed to choose academic courses or practical courses, e.g carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I partly agree with satatement, students should have a choice to select the courses. Advantages for students, by having choices eductors can select any subject with
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 students are interested in
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practical
 courses like
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carpentry
, construstion and so on.
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Make your view clear in the first paragraph. Say what you partly agree with and what you do not agree with. Then explain both sides in full.
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Answer the whole question. Add one main point for academic study and one main point for practical work. Explain why each choice can help students.
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Give a clear end paragraph. Restate your view and say that students should choose a path that fits their skills, plans, and needs.
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Your example needs more detail. For example, explain how a student who likes building can learn carpentry, get work, and help meet the need for skilled workers.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, reasons for choice, limits or other side, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Start each paragraph with one clear main idea. Do not put many ideas in one long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words to show the order of your ideas: First, For example, However, Therefore, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid very short sentence parts such as “Advantages for students”. Write full sentences, such as “There are several advantages for students.”
coherence and cohesion
Check key words for clear meaning. For example, use “educators” for teachers, “practical” for work-based study, and “graduates” for people who finish a course.
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You give a clear general view that students should have a choice.
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You use a relevant example of practical work, such as carpentry and construction.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are linked to the topic and move from student choice to its effect on learning.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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