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Some people believe that we succeed in sport do to our inborn talent. Others argue that continues working on oneself is a key success. What do you think?

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Introduction
Making progress in
sport
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 usually
depens
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depends
 on how
regular
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you develop your physical skills. In my opinion, some people do have a
talent
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 since birth, but widely
sussecfull traning
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successful training
 skills include an accurate timetable and diet
so
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 to become the
best
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 you should not rely only on your
talent
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Body paragraph 1
Kids with inborn
talent
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 often have
heen
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been
 noticed since their childhood. A Society or parents can notice a special kid's
eager
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eagerness
 for
somer
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some
 activities,
such
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 as
a ski
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skiing
, swimming of
tennis
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tennis,
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 that in the future can provide
kid
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the kid
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 with a good career.
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 children with
inborn
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an inborn
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talent
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to
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for
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 football usually watch a
IV
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live
 match, like to run on
field
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the field
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,
know
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and know
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mang
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many
 widely popular footballists.The
generall
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general
 part of society
dont
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doesn't
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 have a gift in doing
sport
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. Because they can have a
hiden
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hidden
 gift
Not
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, not
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 in
the
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apply
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sports.
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, a child was
given
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 to a
sport
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 section he does not like, so that
lower
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lowers
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 his desire
doing
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to do
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 any
sport
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Conclusion
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 the
knoledge
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knowledge
 of your disarels do.

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task response
Give a clear answer to the main question in the first part. Say that hard work is more important than talent, or explain how both work together.
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Discuss both views in full. You explain talent, but you need a full body part about hard work, training, food, rest, and practice.
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Make each main point clear and add an example that proves it. For example, a player may have talent but fail without daily training.
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Write a real conclusion. Repeat your view in simple words and answer the question again. The last line is not clear and does not finish the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, talent paragraph, hard work paragraph, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Start each paragraph with one main idea. Then explain it and give one example. Do not put many different ideas in one paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words to show the flow: First, However, For example, As a result, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that every sentence is complete and easy to understand. Some parts, such as the final sentence, are too unclear for the reader to follow.
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You give your own view early: talent is useful, but people should not depend only on it.
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You use sport examples, such as football, swimming, tennis, training, and diet.
coherence and cohesion
Your first paragraph gives the reader the main topic and your general view.
coherence and cohesion
You try to support your ideas with examples from children and sport.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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